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Monday, 21 November 2016

thida editing paragragh


Walt: fixing a paragraph using fullstops,capital letters, speechmarks


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when it was our last day camping out in the bush my friends and i discovered that there was a bush that was really rare because there wasn’t that much bushes around because it was actually a huge forest it looked so amazing it had the smell of chocolate and strawberries on the outside it looked just like a stinky old bush

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when it was our last day camping out in the bush my friends and   I discovered that there was a bush that was really rare. Because there wasn’t that much bushes around because It was actually a huge forest. It looked so amazing It had the smell of chocolate and straw berries on the outside it looked just like a stinky old bush

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